Dear Lydia,

Please see my feedback documents which I emailed for the Re-write and the Reflection and ensure that these tasks on this page are the most correct versions.

Feedback on the Culture in paintings task: Although this is an excellent discussion of the use of blue and the rivalry between the two painters, it does not address the task correctly for two reasons.  First, it is likely that you referred to research to write this piece which means there should be citation and a reference. Second, you were supposed to explain what you feel is revealed about the culture in the painting you chose. 

Best wishes, Sherin

Dear Lydia,

Forgive me, I did not see that you had already improved your Re-write.  I can see that you added/named the topics in the introduction and changed some informal language.  Thank you for doing this.  Unfortunately, it seems to me that the order of topics in the introduction does not appear to match the order of topics in the main body... please have a look and if you agree, please address this issue?

Best wishes, Sherin

Dear Lydia,

As I said in your first draft of your Reflection, you seem to have learned from the process which is good to hear.  Apologies for the potentially de-motivating information that A grades are extremely hard to achieve for essays at UK universities!

Best wishes, Sherin